BIRTHDAY SURPRISE
“Happy birthday” as Ben's parents yell out in joy. We are going to a forest for your birthday “Yass” Ben whispers they arrive in the scary haunted looking forest. As Ben gets out of the car he sees something in the distance. It looks like an old routine plywood he goes to his mum and begs can i please go exploring can i please go exploring. As he puts on a puppy face she replies with ‘sighs’ fine as he runs in the forest he can hear trees rubbing against each other and wind blowing with nature squeaking. As he gets closer he squints his eyes and sees an odd looking object he starts slowly approaching it he gets to the odd looking thing he sees an abandoned caravan. As he steps in and he sees mold and dust everywhere and water dripping like a hose that has not been proplay turned off it smells like rotten dead rats and elegy. He glandet and a paper bag He hears a beep beep slowly approaches the bag with a crinkled and crest. Then he hears a bep again. He opens up the paper bag with a timer, he's in shock and within ten seconds he runs out of the abandoned caravan like a goat running from the dog on a farm. As he turns back there's know bang he confused then out of the blue confetti explode happy birthday as the mum and dads yells it was a prank
And then he had cake.
THE END
Hi Kade, What a great blog post.
ReplyDeleteI like the way you used different punctuation, to make you're writing flow.
Well done, Keep up the good work.
Hello Kade. I love how you added speech marks to your writing makes it stand out a lot more. The thing that you
ReplyDeletecan improve on is adding a little more punctuation and make it more like depth darker like when you added rotten wraps and made it pop out over all good job
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